Uh oh. UH-OH. Those are totally Mr. Self-Destruct lyrics, and I am totally in love with your template. Although, you know, all this love is probably wholly stemmed from my Nine Inch Nails bias. Trent Reznor is quite the musical genius. But this is not a review concerning him; it’s a review concerning you...Right, moving on.
The layout isn’t at all cluttered, and that makes me happy. It’s organized, and that makes me ecstatic. It’s white; it’s clean. I don’t have to strain myself to read the font, wonderful. What more can I ask for? Faster loading time is what. It takes awhile, even with a super kick ass internet connection. Otherwise, it’s fine.
Kudos.
Entries [30/30]
Now, you see, I’m going to do this review from a completely objective standpoint. Not that I don’t do that with every review; it’s just that usually a diary has something that gets to me personally, like poor grammar, whining, something I can identify with, etc. But you, you I have nothing to go off on. (Also, the coffee thing mentioned before. I can almost assure you my not getting emotionally invested in this review is for the best...Almost.)
I started here. Sure, sure. It was nicely written, I appreciate your vocabulary, and I like that you have emotion. There’s grammar; that makes me happy. Yay. The next entry had different content, but struck me the same way. Wonderful, great. It’s coherent. Going to the next entry, it’s a religious piece. Still nicely written, huzzah. However, I am still just kind of looking in. Meah.
So I guess what I am trying to say is that you’re a good writer. The thing is, you aren’t my kind of writer. But don’t worry. I won’t deduct points for that. I mean, you would be great for a certain audience. I’m thinking that audience compiles of young adult, religious diary readers that like your emotional-journalistic kind of writing. I am not really one of those young adults. That would explain why I wasn’t absorbed. I could have been, though (maybe if I had my coffee).
The little things: you occasionally have a typo. No biggie. You update few and far between; you only had one entry in February of this year. I’m not going to penalize you, but geeze. That’s a long time to not write anything. If you do get more readers, they might not like that. Just a little heads up.
I don’t know what else to say here.
Goodies [15/15]
An Intro, Bio thing (which includes a disclaimer), reviews, cast page, past layouts, quizzes, diaryrings, a wishlist link for Diaryland gold membership, some miscellaneous links, and a vote link for those who so choose to do so. Okay then.
Errors [3/10]
While the layout itself might not be cluttered, some of your entries are. Perhaps instead of using
to separate your paragraphs, you should use the
tag. There would be more distinction between your thoughts and would make things much easier to read.
Also, your content loads much slower than your images. Sometimes it wouldn’t load at all. It was like, "Okay, what am I reviewing then?" You might want to do some finagling to fix that.
Contact [5/5]
Notes, a non-traditional guestbook, a comment system, tagboard, AIM, Yahoo!, MSN, and e-mail. Nice.
Linked [5/5]
Hip, hip hooray! It’s there.
Extras [5/5]
Well, I am always biased when it comes to Nine Inch Nails, so there you go.
Will I be back? [0/5]
Sorry, no go.
Total [86/100]
Find your audience; then everything will be peachy. (Just like that word.)
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